Well I took everything that I engulfed during the peer editing and put it into good use. I was able to lengthen my paper and make a pretty good introduction. I think its a pretty good rough draft for this paper, I found a few more arguments when I made my description more in depth. I found out about the floor in the office, as well as the picture hanging on the wall in the background. These were two things I had not really paid any attention too. I was also able too fix up my grammatical errors and finish up with a conclusion, which I still think needs some major work but I'll concentrate on it more for the final draft. Rough Draft done, Fianl Draft next, bring it on.